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keeeks

am 20.02.2009 um 19:01 Uhr

Eure Meinung zu diesem Text. ;)… würde mich über viele kommentare freuen

How could I ever think I couldn’t live without you
It seems like it would be so much difficult without your love
I thought the pain would never go away
I didn’t believe I could forget you
You and all the time we spend
You and you mistakes
You had so much
But I never realise that
I thought it all was my fault
All my mistakes
But my only mistake were you
However, people make mistakes
Yes, my mistake was serious
Well, so what?!
Now you’re past
I leave you behind
My mistake, I washed it away
Live goes on and I didn’t say it would be easy
But easier
How could I ever wish to live with you
Now you’re alone
Alone with your mistakes

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  • von die_lele am 26.02.2009 um 20:50 Uhr

    find ich auch schön.. nur noch eine verbesserung:
    but my only mistake WAS you.
    hat was sehr schönes..

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  • von keeeks am 21.02.2009 um 16:07 Uhr

    klar, vielen dank!! :)

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  • von MARVELOUSx3 am 21.02.2009 um 15:36 Uhr

    How could I ever think I couldn’t live without you
    It seemED like it would be so difficult without your love
    I thought the pain would never FADE away
    I didn’t believe I could forget you
    You and all the time we spenT
    You WITH youR mistakes
    YOU HAVE SO MANY
    But I never realiZED that
    I thought EVERYTHING was my fault
    All my mistakes
    But my only mistake were you
    However, people make mistakes
    Yes, my mistake was serious
    Well, so what?!
    Now you’re A THING OF THE PAST
    I leave you behind
    My mistake, I washed it away
    LIFE goes on and I didn’t say it would be easy
    But easier
    How could I ever wish to live with you
    Now you’re alone
    Alone with your mistakes

    habs mal ein bisschen überarbeitet :] hope u like it !

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  • von keeeks am 20.02.2009 um 22:33 Uhr

    könnt ihr mir sagen wo und was genau falsch ist? weil mein englisch ist nicht grade das beste ^^

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  • von Ocean19 am 20.02.2009 um 20:17 Uhr

    Die Geschichte, die du darin beschreibst find ich gut. Die Fehler in dem Englisch solltest du aber nochmal überarbeiten. 😉

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